Here is another poem that I wrote! please comment! you can hate or love just tell me why!

Question

He smiles

He smiles up at the moon

He stares down at me

He whispers to me

Have you ever danced with the Devil?

He kisses me

He steals my answer

he steals my wit

with that kiss

I realize

I will never let him go

He is walking a way now

No!

He is mine,

he is mine!

I call out for him

I call again

he keeps walking

he turns back to me

He smiles

Gruesome smile

then he is gone

Answer 1

I know that some people proby love it but I didn't

I dont like that style of poetry I guess

Answer 2

This is much better laid out like this. Thank you

very interesting keep the ideas coming and the formatting readable and you will be very good in no time at all.

Answer 3

i liked it. it was hard to comprehend at first but i like it alot. great job.

Answer 4

It's a little predictable as far as relationship poems go. Try playing with some unique imagery and metaphors. Each line doesn't have to be so literal and subject-verb.