Here is my last poem that i need someone to critique?

Question

Brother

Brothers are awesome

are they not?

My brother is

really tip top

He's been real sweet

for all of his life

He's always thought

of his sisters before himself

He had no idea

that his sisters

thought of him so,

until one day where his life was changed

But five days before

his 19th birthday

His world was

drastically changed

Foe he had been

in a bad wreck

that should of

took his life

But the only thing that

was took from him

was his ability to

writ ewith his right

His sisters were there

right by his side

thru the next three

days and nights

And now he's trying

to get thru life

and while going

thru everyday strife

He about didnt

get to graduate

if it wasnt

for his mother

And now he wonders

what he's going to do

He also wonders what

or how the rest of his life will be

Answer 1

are you attempting free verse? because if you are trying to make it structured there is no rhyme scheme and no meter to it. and while this may be a matter of personal taste, this tells a very personal story, but there is no real depth to it beyond that. and also there seems to be no purpose to the enjambment. some repetition might help give it more structure, but that is only one suggestion. give it some purpose!

Answer 2

It has no rhythm

Answer 3

not to be mean but you need to respell line 25 the words write and with are mixed up   sorry about your brother i loved your poem.    from ur new friend kaylee