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In a very strange way, music has turned in an essential part of our lives. Music is everywhere we go. We hear it in the car, in school, and in our jobs, it’s unavoidable. With music all over the world, people express their feelings, ideals, and points of view. A musician has the power to be heard, and move the entire world for a single cause. Persons like Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd, Queen, etc. had inspired millions with their lyrics. They represent the hope of all their fans around the world. We always have to remember the role of music in our lives and it makes the world a better place.

Answer 1

"In a very strange way, music has turned into an essential part of our lives.  Music is everywhere we go.  We listen to it in the car, in school, and at our jobs - it's unavoidable.  People all over the world express their feelings, ideas, and points of view through music.  A musician has the power to be heard and move the entire the world for a single cause.  People such as Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd, Queen, etc inspired millions of people with their lyrics.  They represent the hope of all their fans around the world.  We have to always remember the role of music in our lives and that it makes the world a better place."

Answer 2

music is in everywhere we goj

jobs----work place

its ok

Answer 3

The others have corrected it Ok  but take the COMMA out before AND!  

Answer 4

In a very strange way, music has turned (into) an essential part of our lives. Music (can be found anywhere we go). We hear it in the car, in school, and in our jobs, (which makes it) unavoidable. With music (originating from) all over the world, people express their feelings, ideals, and points of view. A musician has the power to be heard, and move the entire world for a single cause. Persons like Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd, Queen, etc. (have) inspired millions with their lyrics. They represent the hope of all their fans around the world. We always have to remember the role of music in our lives and (how) it (can) make the world a better place.

Answer 5

In a very strange way, music has turned "into a very essential" part of our lives. Music is everywhere we go.

We hear it in the car, in school, and "at" our jobs, it's "almost" unavoidable. With music being played all over the world, people "are able to" express their feelings, ideals and points of view. "Musicians' " have the power to be heard and "possibly" move the entire world for a single cause. "People" like Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd, Queen etc. "have" inspired millions with their lyrics. They represent the hope of all their fans around the world. We "should always remember the role music played in our lives and that it makes the world a happier place."

Answer 6

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music is everwhere .

in our jobs to on our

instead of with music --- People all over the world express their .... points of views .instead of persons -- people

instead of has ---- have

instead of they --- their lyricinstead of the role of music--- Music's role

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Answer 7

In a very strange way, music has become an essential part of our lives. Its everywhere; in the car, at school, and on our jobs. It's no wonder, because it is one way that people express their feelings, ideals, and points of view. Persons like Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd, Queen, etc. had inspired millions with their lyrics and it allowed them to be heard, to represent the hopes of their fans and to advance their cause.

It has made our world into a better place.

Answer 8

In a very strange way, music has turned around an essential part of our lives. Music is everywhere we go.

We hear it in the car, in school and in our job's. It is unavoidable.

People express their feelings, ideals (idea's?) and view's all over the world through music.

A musician has the power to be heard and to move the entire world for one cause.

Musicians and artists such as Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd and Queen have inspired millions with their lyrics. They represent hope for all their fans.

We always remember the role of music in our lives.

Music makes the world a better place.  

Answer 9

Ahh let's see.

In a very strange way, music has turned INTO an essential part of our lives. Music is everywhere we go. We hear it in the car, in school, and in our jobs. It's unavoidable. With music all over the world, people express their feelings, ideals, and points of view. A musician has the power to be heard, and move the entire world for a single cause. Persons like Bono, Bob Marley, Pink Floyd, Queen, etc. HAVE inspired millions with their lyrics. They represent the hope of all their fans around the world. We always have to remember the role of music in our lives, and how it makes the world a better place.

I don't know why I retyped that whole paragraph when there were very few mistakes.

I'm sorry if I missed some, but hey, I tried.