Hey is this poem romantic, cheesy or just plain terrible?

Question

In love with a girl and wrote this about her, guess what her name is ;).

Anyway she liked it, wondering what you lot think.

Dont worry it is short,

http://ricard08.deviantart.com/art/Samantha-78887549

If you like it then check this one too its about the same person (but slightly more emo though =P) : this one actually has rhyme

http://ricard08.deviantart.com/art/Love-s-Labours-78886611

If you liked those check out my page,

http://ricard08.deviantart.com/

BUT the question generally relates to the first link!

And then the second one if you like what you saw!

Answer 1

First one is sweet.  the second one the line about killing scares me. But good job :)