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Heya!! Which Poem do you like better? I like the second one...

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1) Grabbing for breath

Tears erupt through her constricted pupils

Marking her cheeks with splashes of black liner

Holding on to the rail she stumbles, her teeth

Glisten in the white sun

As she clenches for her tightened muscles

She begs him to stop, screaming out

Through an ear deafening explosion, but

Fingers like stale noodles grapple mercilessly at her pits

She grabs for her breath, helpless

Pleading for her deflated lungs to regain strength

The fingers finally satisfied retreat

She inhales deeply the kind air

Her muscles loosen

Left with only a smile, she escapes

The firm grip of laughter

2)Your Life

You cut off the pedals and gather the thorns

You pull on your collar to loosen its tug

Colored emptiness intrudes your thoughts

You think of a dream you once lost

Swelled wrinkles are reflected on your broken mirror

You catch soured tear drops in your pockets

Nodding slightly to the left

You wait for the sound of laughter to leave

Trail behind the logic of common sense

You watch hunger happen again and again

They all shake at you and agree with your feeble nature

You dip into the ocean of guilt only for a moment

Get split open by the monstrous waves

Turn from page to page never finding your place

You trace the scratches on your arms

Roll over to the cold side of the bed

You remember how it was being asleep

Tell stories so no one forgets

You always leave the cemetery vigilantly

You talk slow but move fast

Your walls are separated from the floor

You fill yourself up with sweetened plastic

The ceiling plunges into the dirt

You rock back and forth as you sit for dinner

Sitting had always come easy

You know how to warm up the doors before you enter

Say out loud your name until it becomes unfamiliar

You are negatively charged by the battery infested toys

The noise the alarm makes in the morning turns your stomach

Standing there always waiting,

Waiting to be awaken, but always feeling shaken

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  1. Neither.

    Both are difficult reads for me.


  2. I like them both but the second one could have been a little shorter but it is the better one, the first one is cute tho.  

  3. Uch!

  4. they're both good, but I also like 2 better.

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