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Question

i was bored and this the result!

My heart has split away from me

Running from my head

Has gone to search the universe

Leaving earth for dead

I cannot scream for its return

Nor can I break down

I can only watch the summers pass

Watch winters face frown

My heart

Don’t come here again

Till my tears shroud the rain

Let the stars join the moon

And i will see you soon

thank you

Answer 1

For a poem which came about because of boredom you have done well. It is easy to read and easy to understand, particularly "Till my tears shroud the rain"

Well done O' bored one.

Answer 2

Sounds good to me.

Answer 3

good imagery

well done!

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