Hi what do you think of this poem?

Question

smile sprinkles thousand hapiness

sadness dims the lights

anger crushed the world

power controlled by lust

Answer 1

good poem. it would be wonderful if you could make it a bit longer. and the line, "anger crushedd the world", can be written as "anger crushes the world". think of how the people who read it may affect their life. if you would put this line in the present tense form, people would think and reflect more on it. i hope you can understand what i mean. good job tho. good luck! :)

Answer 2

Nice!

Pooh on the people who wanted rhyme. This poem projects a certain ambiance that rhyme could ruin. Sometimes rhyme is good, but it usually just sounds Dr. Seuss-ish.

P.S. Someone said it needs to be longer. I think it's good short. Instead of scripting the reader's thoughts, it leaves the reader pensive.

Answer 3

Did you make it up? Kudos to you. Thats  buetiful just buetiful.

Answer 4

Lovely poem! <3

Answer 5

I really like your poem.

You have got talent, keep up the good work!

Answer 6

SRY IM A BIT RUDE BUT NEVER READ IN PUBLIC THE SECOND HALF DOIESN MACH THE FIRST SRY .

Answer 7

it's a kinda  mysterious but i got the point. it is a good poem to me.

Answer 8

um, i love it but just in my opinion.. maybe you should make the first part ryme with the 2nd prt...