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How 'bout this one? it's kind of strong be prepared?

by Guest59803  |  earlier

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i know it switches tences, and i like that. it's like a psychotic shotgun pattern. what do you poets think? thank you!

well he was rolling outta cowtown

and he had a heavy heart

he hated everything, he wasnt on a lark

things got bad, things got worse

sometimes we all know how it goes

some sob was going down

you better take it deep in your heart

maybe a mortgage banker maybe a rich tycoon

maybe some kinda politico, who know's? maybe you?

but some sob is going down thats all i got to say

when the blood is spilled, don't look my way

i wouldnt want it to spill on you

someone's got to make it right

someone's got to make it real

GET THE F' OUTTA MY WAY....

'cause I'M an Irish freight train

headed staright to h**l

drinking bad whiskey and ringing a bell

I got no conscience, I got no will

yeah, i'm gonna kill some sob one a these daze

just to see how it feels.......

woo-woo.....

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  1. Sounds a bit thrusted towards the indulgenceness of anger. and thrive for revenge. allthough..i enjoyed it.

    Keep writing.


  2. its ok..... i guess? je ne sais pas

  3. it was really strong until the woo-woo but i loved it!

  4. This poem is for the stage, it's a screamer. I love it. It is like the Kid Rock song.

  5. OMG

    I <3333333 IT

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