How's my storyline??

Question

Characters:

Elizabeth "Lizzie" Whittier- Main Girl Character

Joseph Price- Lizzie's Best Friend

When Lizzie witnesses her parents and her sister dying in a freak accident when she is nine-years-old, she is convinced that it was no accident. [ she goes to live with her aunt who is all the family she has left] She never told hardly anyone what she saw besides her best friend, Joseph, who didn't even believe her. She became totally convinced that she imagined what she saw until she has a dream about the incident. It replays in her head over and over again until she has the vivid image of it. Lizzie knows that it was too real for it just to be in her imagination. At her eighteenth birthday, she makes it her life quest to find out what killed her parents and sister many years ago. Was it an evil, human murderer or something supernatural? She was determined to find the killer and destroy it even if it meant risking her own life.

Is it a good storyline?

Answer 1

You should write it in stream of consciousness

Answer 2

I think the name Lizzie is annoying.

Answer 3

I really like the story line I'm sure that it will bring loads of suspense. One thing is how are you going to get from a nine year old girl to eighteen quickly in the book? I'm sure you will figure it out because its a good storyline.

Hope I helped

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Answer 4

yep...but it sounds kinda PREDICTABLE~

Answer 5

Pretty good actually. It'll be even better if you write it from a 1st person point of view, that way it might be more...psychologically effective. I dunno if that makes sense but good luck, sounds like an interesting story.