How's this for a beginning of a story poem?

Question

this poem is a introductory to a story. . . tell me if you think it is good.

The tips of the Sun's fingers touched the lake,

Little Diamonds dance, over the water in a wake.

A Breeze races across the skies,

Spreading gossip; lies.

The Weeping Willow tossing its arms in dance,

Beautiful, even at a glance.

Shadows join the Willow's Dance

Over the Water's stance

Feet thud over the packed earth;

The Earth's very heart beat

In joyful Murth

Come to meet

At the Lake's Edge

how's that? should i take away, or add more?

Answer 1

Very descriptive! I could imagine the willow and the breeze and your use of personification and alliteration is good.

Keep going...

You will do well.