How's this poem just finished it?

Question

a thumping heart is the beat of life

though my heart is broken it still beats

walking in my shoes is another sign that tells me the same path is up ahead

again as i walk that path i know it's the places we were last together

living became a part of the empty hole of what's left of me inside me

lost isn't the word because i still know the road to try to get what was lost back

''just takes time''

why is love a part of a person for something so powerful needs to be in chains

than again something so use to destroying it's impossible to keep love concealed

for a life that needs to be accepted it's hard to run from love

because to be happy seem to be a stoke of luck

Answer 1

its pretty good, i belive it could use some tweaking though. nvm, i think i like it just as it is. what do u think of mine?

Sometimes we have crazy dreams

That lead us to do some crazy things

Sometimes we do these without thinking

Of what we’re really doing

Sometimes, it seems right until you find

That its not what you had in mind

Sometimes, it doesn’t always work on your end,

But don’t hide under bed

Sometimes, things are better

Sometimes there not

Just because you didn’t understand this one,

Doesn’t mean you wont get the next one

Sometimes life is unfair

but we all go through our share,

sometimes life throws crazy things at you

and all you have to do

is have a crazy dream

sometimes, crazy dreams can lead us to do some pretty crazy things

Answer 2

good hey copuld you critique my poem

Answer 3

A great start -- keep polishing.

Answer 4

I really like it! It has a great meaning in just a few lines. Just check the grammar a bit, because it's missing a few words (I do those mistakes myself when I edit and erase some verses before publishing)

This is very very very good. You certainly put all your heart and mind to it.