How about these sales letters ?

Question

"NOW, Make Money Giving Away FREE e-Book Mall !

Own Your Own $7 Mall and Skyrocketing Your Affiliate

Commission Promoting Affordable 7 Dollar Info Products

and Your Own Website."

(Please check my grammar and sentences structure except for the capital letters and the word "info")

Answer 1

Agree with ansirs, this is c**p. Try this revamp.

"Like to make some serious money and help people?"

Best commisions, promote your own site, can't miss.

Ask me how, limited opportunity for 15 people only this week.

Answer 2

Hi, if this is a joke then its a mess, if you are serious then its even worse, it makes no sense at all, total rubbish.

If you are not an english speaker then try something like The Babel Fish Translation tool uses machine translation technology to translate sentences in one language into another language. Babel Fish can translate either text or full web pages from the internet.

Write your sales text out in your own language and then BabelFish to translate it, it won't do a perfect job but it will certainly be much better than what you have supplied.

Good Luck.

Answer 3

Own your personal $7 Mail and Skyrocketing Your Affiliate            or...

Have your own................

Promote Affordable $7 info Procucts on Your Own Website