I'm attempting my first poem. (Inspired by one of my questions.)
"Ahem.."
Taking unnecessary risks, was never my intention.
I was afraid feelings that were said to be,
"Worst than death."
I didn't want to end up like the others.
My heart was to remain intact and untouched.
So created a barrier.
To keep the love away.
But one day.
He found me.
Discovering an opening in my heart.
He made his move.
With a simple embrace.
And words so true, whispered into my ears.
He has broken that barrier.
My beloved.
The one person who finally found me.
Freed me from the cold.
And made my heart warm.
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A little too cliche maybe? How did I do?
Any suggestions on how I can fix this? Something is amiss with this poem. I can feel it. =/
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