How can I improve this introduction?

Question

I'm writing a history essay about the rise of Hitler. My introduction is below, can anyone make any improvements?

In January of 1933, Adolf Hitler was awarded the position of chancellor. This election into a position of power was the result differing situations over time and Hitler’s manipulation of them. Post WW1 German was a nation of great political, social and economic turmoil. The signing of the Treaty of Versailles left the country devastated economically due to reparations, socially due to article 231, the guilt clause and politically due to the introduction of a new democracy into an unstable society who did not wish it. This caused the following years to be fraught with extremism and violence; it was attacked on both sides. The three crises of 1923 are a clear example of this. The country experienced a brief recession between 1924 and 1929 due to the initiation of the Dawes Plan by foreign minister Stresemann. This prosperity was extinguished quickly after the Wall Street Crash of 1929 and a great depression sunk over Germany. It was these circumstances along with n**i Party’s tactics which gave Hitler the chance to gain power.

Answer 1

put the first two sentences at the end- they don't fit before ww1

i know that you're trying to intro the paper w/ hitler in the first sentence but as long as you lead up to that it will be a good inrto

Answer 2

something like :

Hitler was an incredibly gifted person. He was an intelligent speaker, as he managed to sway 14.7 million people to vote for him even though his ideas were unpopular. Hitler was able to take over half of Europe with a country that was heavily in debt and had poor morale. He even negotiated to surpass all levels of government and declare himself dictator. Hitler was a gifted painter although most, if not all, of his works were never published. His paintings were done in watercolors and mostly of landscapes. He was painting even after the year of 1919 when politics became his overwhelming concern. Hitler was an extremely bright child. He even said, "The school work was ridiculously easy, leaving me so much free time that the sun saw more of me than my room...? Although as he got older his marks started to slip and the teachers began to get a bad impression of him, he was still very bright (one cannot become stupider). He eventually went on to join the army and become a semi-successful soldier (on the account that he was merely wounded and not killed). CHILDHOOD The Hitler family consisted of the mother, Klara, the father, Alois, and two children, Alois and Angela. Klara gave birth to a baby boy named Adolf on April 20,

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was now quite happy it did not end his attempts to dominate the family. He would have also liked to take over Russia but he attacked too early in the war and made foolish decisions about the time of year in which to attack. ADOLESCENCE Hitler ended his term at Volksschule (sort of like elementary school but for five years) at age 11. Adolf now took to politics somewhat. Hitler refused to admit his rejection and became more and more detached from reality. " To do this Hitler planned to use Russia to help him take over Europe, then dispose of Russia. Hitler continued to read May's books even when he became Reich Chancellor; he even read the whole series on the American West. On June 25, 1895 Alois retired at 58 to a life of leisure and beekeeping. In 1906, Klara was diagnosed with sarcome pectoris, a malignant growth in the breast. Having finished elementary school he had two choices: to go to Realschule, which emphasized technical and scientific studies, or go to the Gymnasium, which was a more classical sort of school. THE WAR "Hitler's ultimate goal was the establishment of a greater Germany than had ever existed before in history. The world would be a very different place if it weren't for him, and although the things he did were wrong the human race benefited from his actions. The only country he could see blocking his goal was France.

Answer 3

Intro?  That's the whole story.  Instead, after sentence 2, introduce the main topics briefly, then make each of these topics the lead for a paragraph in the rest of the essay.

Answer 4

In January of 1933, Adolf Hitler ceazed the position of chancellor in Germany following his captivity in prison and his rise to the political elite of the country. He formed the n**i party, putting him in a position of authority which was the result of varying situations and Hitler’s cunning manipulation of them. Post WWI German was a nation of great political, social, and economic turmoil. The signing of the Treaty of Versailles by the winners of World War I left the country devastated economically due to reparations, socially due to article 231, the guilt clause, and politically due to the introduction of a new democracy into an unstable society who did not wish for its enactment. Hitler used the devastated nation to capitalize on his rise of power promising a new world era dominated by the German people. He created a sense of nationalism and a belief that he was a savior of his people. This caused the following years to be fraught with extremism and violence; and manipulation of the population to regain power in the international system. The three crises of 1923 are a clear example of the economic struggle, destruction and use of ideas that the country suffered from. Germany experienced a brief recession between 1924 and 1929 due to the initiation of the Dawes Plan by foreign minister Stresemann. This prosperity was extinguished quickly after the Wall Street Crash of 1929 and a great depression sunk over Germany. It was these circumstances along with n**i Party’s tactics which gave Hitler the chance to gain power.