How can I make this letter sound proffesional?

Question

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to you as I was watching certain Dell'Acqua shows and I had become very curious about the runway music used. Especially for the following show and seasons:

Fall/Winter 2005 Womenswear

Fall/Winter 2006 Womenswear

Fall/Winter 2006 Menswear

I was wondering if it were possible if you could tell me the names of the tracks music for the shows listed above, and if possible could I have the high quality tracks sendt to me via sendspace.com or any other file sharing format, for me to enjoy.

Yours faithfully,

-Larry Newton

Answer 1

rewrite it!!!! they will never ever do what you have requested, as if they are going to spend 4 hours trailing through archives to send you some music to listen to!!! good luck though!

Answer 2

I am writing concerning the music used while watching the Dell'Acqua shows.  The ones that interested me were played during the  Fall/winter 2005 and 2006 women's wear and the fall/winter 2006 men's wear. Is it possible that you could tell me the names of the recording artist(s) or albums?  I would

appreciate it very much.

Sincerely,

I personally don't think I would ask to have the tracks sent because they won't do it.  Another thing, they may not share the info anyway, but you can try.  This letter would be more precise to the point and a bit more professional. Good Luck!