How do u like my poem? 14 years old?

Question

i am destiny

i sing these words to you now,

because the point of light grows smaller,

ever smaller now,

ever distant now.

And with this song, i pray i may

push back the tides of war and death.

so, i sing these words

that this light, this tiny

ray of light and hope may live on.

i dare not hope that i

may live on too.

Answer 1

I googled it and there were no matches so I guess its original, the fact that people think it is plagiarised is itself an indication of its quality.

For a 14 year old it is brilliant but a few beers a few one night stands, where you think it is love,, losing a close friend and you will find life is not like that.

But though I find the sentiments immature the structure and use of words is extremely good.

Can we have the occasional happy poem. or funny one please.

Answer 2

I Tottaly lurved it!

=]

Answer 3

dude this isnt urs

Answer 4

I think it's really good. I used to write poetry when I was a teenager also. Keep it up!

Answer 5

I like it. It's amazing for someone of your age. You're good. You should consider a career and write some more.

Answer 6

Its awesome you should post more!

Answer 7

wow that was great!!! you should definently follow up on thet....tell me when you publish your first poem id love to buy a copy

Answer 8

you did  a good job :)