How do you all like my poem?

Question

Though it seems an easy thing to hide

The words are screaming inside

It’s not the secret you’d think it’d be

But in a way it’s taking over me

I wish so much you’d feel it too

Oh, so badly, I want to be with you

Answer 1

it's okay. you'r rhymy....but thats okay. it's good. show's that you have soul in your writting! :)

Answer 2

Wow. I like it but it should be a song.  

Answer 3

Ohh this is a good poem good job  

Answer 4

This was a fantastic poem. It has so much detail and you really created the image of what was happening in my mind right away. A++

Answer 5

so beautiful it is special

full of meaning

Answer 6

Its good. It has meaning and you can understand the poem. Good job!  

Answer 7

Thats exactically how i feel. It sounds like you put a lot of emotion into this poem. I absoultly love it. ♥ :-)  

Answer 8

Wow! That is really cool :) Did you make that up yourself? You should find someone to publish it!  

Answer 9

Hey sounds good!

Though the first line has 9 syllables, and the 2nd only has 7...so it sounds like theres something missing from the 2nd line. How about changing it to somethin like "...the words are screaming to me inside"..?

Good overall though :)

Answer 10

its ok

check this poem out

My First Time

The sky was dark

The moon was high

All alone

Just her and I

Her hair so soft

Her eyes so blue

I knew just what

She wanted to do

Her skin so soft

Her legs so fine

I ran my fingers

Down her spine

I didn't know how

But I tried my best

To place my hand

On her b*****s

I remember my fear

My fast beating heart

But slowly she spread

Her legs apart

And when she did it

I felt no shame

All at once

The white stuff came

At last it's finished

It's all over now

My first time

Milking a cow!

Answer 11

this has meaning

Answer 12

cool

Answer 13

It's okay...  

Answer 14

i dislike sappy poems

but to someone who likes them, its fine.

Answer 15

That's actually really good.

Answer 16

yeah its nice, very simple

Answer 17

Wow it is beautiful, you should publish it for free at a public library.  You sure have some talent, keep it up!

Answer 18

thats pretty darn good!

Answer 19

I like it...very short, but those little bit of words mean A LOT.  

Answer 20

I know exactly how you feel, this is good.

Answer 21

i luv it u should make it into a song!

Answer 22

It's alright......I guess.

Answer 23

the words are really good, you  just need to think of a way to make the spacing fit. the timing is a little off. in other words; when i read it, i couldnt do it straight each line with the same rhythm...like for instance the first two lines.. the first one is 10 syllables, the second is 7, so after reading the first, the second one gets cut off earlier than you would think it should..so maybe for that second line for instance..try to add like.."The words are screaming (to me) inside"

Answer 24

I love it! Great creativity!

Answer 25

Its good.

Answer 26

It's all right, but the "the words are screaming inside" part doesn't seem to work quite right. The line is too short. To follow the flow, maybe picking a different word with more syllables would help. Poetry doesn't necessarily have to follow formal syntax but it would probably help in this case. Then again, if you like it, that's fine. A poem like this won't win you any awards but if it helps you express yourself, that's the most important part.