How do you feel? When?

Question

-you read this? Do you think it's good? What does it convey to you? Rate it on a 1-10 scale. Thanks!

This, like everything is slipping. Far away,

Gone for me. Not important though, it'd be

Gone for you too. Waves keep coming,

Keep coming. Too many. I took too many,

Can't seem to think.

Scratching on the floor, hope you find. Hope

THEY let you see. I'm sorry, I told lies. I found

Your secret. After. Too late. You. You tried to

Protect me. Ha. Know now, I didn't listen.

Spilling, my head. I couldn't speak if I had to.

Good that I don't. But, writing is hard. Concentrate.

I love you. When I said, "If I die, I'll be somewhere

Alone. Scared." I lied. I'll be fine. Sam, I know I'll

Be fine. You be fine too.

This doesn't hurt, just can't feel. Like sleep. I

Don't want to move, maybe, I shouldn't. Maybe,

People will come before. Hope you don't. Shouldn't

See me like this. I made mistake.

Can't remember why I started, all I think is Sam.

Don't cry. I keep here with you. I know,

Sure of it. Don't cry, don't forget me.

Answer 1

5.5

Answer 2

I like it, it's bleak but emotive

Answer 3

wow, that's the best poem i have read all day. The way it cuts off in a middle of a sentence makes it sound like your struggling for air when you read it, but that's awesome! I had to read it a few times to  pick up the rhythm and unravel it's meaning, i guess only you will ever understand it's true meaning. You wrote it.

Answer 4

It is moving in an eerie sense, you make the reader feel a certain loss but you keep it hidden very well.

..Dark and heavy I cannot ascribe it a number, as it is in a sense your feelings to which a number cannot be attached... Not rhythmic but readable.

Answer 5

9.5! that is great!

Answer 6

i would give it a 7.

it has a lot of emotion.

u could improve on it though