How do you like my poem, "Adonai, my belonging"?

Question

While You come so near, I come so far,

Romance me, my Adonai, show me Who You are.

Allow me to experience Your eloquent Glory and Grace,

Hide not from me the Power in Your Righteous Face.

There is none like You, my God, my buckler and my shield,

Greater is my belonging to You then any other sheep

Of the field.

The journey, as well as, my love for You is Timeless. This

Much, I know,

Nevertheless, in my travel I can not be lost because You're

Everywhere I try to go.

I love You, my God & Lover of my soul.

Answer 1

Since you did not ask for a philosophical evaluation of it, I assume that you missed the category by one. It is the next one down.

Answer 2

Not a big fan of religious poetry.

Answer 3

it was good but don't put this stuff on the web unless you know what kind of c**p you'll get from people who can't stand anyone believing in something greater than themselves (and i know i'll get thumbs down from them for this but i dont care).

Answer 4

Does vomit ruin a computer keyboard?