How do you like my poem,"Up on High, my Adonai"?

Question

Alone, out there in the darkness and nearest to the sky,

I reach up on High to my Adonai.

Up on High, it is He Who saves me from the perils of

Wickedness in time,

Take me, my Adonai, imprison my heart from an

Incomplete love, my only crime.

Oh, let these words be a testimony for all the world to

Believe in Our romantic story,

For it involves a prince reaching up on High so that

His Adonai may receive all Glory.

Therefore, together out there in the light and nearest

To the earth,

I reach up on High, to my Adonai, for all that it is worth.

Answer 1

that was beautiful. i like it a lot. you are such a talented person.

Answer 2

Look at how these poets wrote poetry. They actually said something in words to evoke an image in your mind’s eye.



http://quotations.about.com/cs/poemlyric...

http://www.poets.org/poet.php/prmPID/126

http://www.netpoets.com/classic/076000.h...

You could rewrite what you have to make sense. Try again.

Jeff (weseye) Wesley

Answer 3

You should def be a poet. You have talent. Go for it. I write poetry too!