How do you like my poem?

Question

Sometimes at night,

when I look to the sky,

I start thinking of you,

and then ask myself "why?"

"Why do I love you?"

I think and smile,

because I know,

the list could run on for a mile,

the whisper of your voice,

the softness of your touch,

so many little things,

make me love you so much,

The way you support me,

all my emotions

the way that you care,

and show so much devotion,

The way that your kiss,

fills me with desire,

and how you hold me,

with the warmth of a fire,

The way your eyes shine,

when you look at me,

lost in them forever,

is where I want to be,

How you finish the puzzle,

that lies inside my heart,

how deep in my soul,

you are a very important part,

I could go on for days,

telling of what I feel,

but all you really must know is...

my love for you is real.

I am just a guy who writes poetry as a hobby...english is not my native language so I am sorry if the grammar isnt perfect.Rate please.Here is a link with other poems

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20080713171029AA5QgMv&pa=FYd1D2bwHTHzJb9vHe45Q_YVgpDodGmBSg4xa93AHo9Z2g--&paid=asked&msgr_status=

Answer 1

Some girl is going to be lucky to have a romantic poet for a boyfriend.  Sounds like you had someone in mind when you wrote it!

Answer 2

dude, thats sweet

Answer 3

h**l rthis is the best poem i ever heard in yahoo answers/my school(kids in my school are really bad)

Answer 4

I love that poem. You are so creative.You should be a writer!! I'd give that poem a perfect 10.

Answer 5

wow that was amazing i think its great u should keep writing them i give it a perfect 10 on a scale of 1 to 10

Answer 6

Well, seeing as how you are a beginner,

7.6

Answer 7

put a little melody on it and...hola.

you have a new song!!!!!

Answer 8

Your thoughts are touching and your poetry is great!

Answer 9

Not bad for someone who isn't good in english!  One suggestion and it's very hard to do...keep the rythym example:

The way you support me,

all my emotions

the way that you care,

and show so much devotion,  < take "so" out and re-read.  I believe it's called "cadence"?

All in all, you've done well.  Keep writing..Poetry is quickly becoming a lost art.  Keep it alive dear friend!

Answer 10

Speaking as a female I love the poem What every girl loves a man that can express feelings to that degree. have you considered helping those out that don't have your silver tongue like writing poems from traits they tell you and you you using that info to construct a special poem for them.?Just a thought.

Answer 11

I love it !

Its very romantic sweet and cute and makes me feel like smiling!!!give it to a girl you like she'll love it!!

8!!

Answer 12

oh yes tats sweet..

Answer 13

Very, very good!

Answer 14

This is impressive for someone for whom English is a second language.  And the sentiment is lovely, Lucky girl!

Answer 15

If this was written four days ago.. then I wonder where my ex husband got it from almost 5 years ago. If you dont believe me. Go check out his profile "[e-mail]" Its the same d**n poem. I figured he didnt write it so I googled the first line of the poem and got like a 100 hits with like 1,000 people claiming this poem was written by them. But whoever did write this did a d**n good job. Too bad they cant get the proper recognition because everyone else is claiming its theres. I guess thats when you know you have talent.

Answer 16

OMG I LOVE IT!!!!!SO SWEET AND ROMANTIC!!! i wish my bf wrote poetry as good as that!on a scale of 1 to 10, 15!

Answer 17

I love it