How do you like this poem?

Question

This is meant to be read aloud, so if you can, go ahead.

"Punk *****"

Right now I feel like the world's most hated,

fated to stay dead with my heart deflated.

But I march on unabated, so one day , I can say "Hey look I made it."

To understand love you need hate and I appreciate it,

that you hate me for me and not someone shady

I stay true to myself and I'm not jaded,

but for you I can only pray that, one day

*pause*

one day,

you realize the real lies through your real eyes.

the same eyes i saw you through

before other people got a hold of you, took control of you,

had you doing things you told you'd never do.

I understand people change, but it should come from within.

You burden yourself by playing pretend

I feel sick knowing that I call you my friend because

being two-faced is a game you play

to manipulate others so you can have it your way.

Best friends forever? Nah I knew you'd betray.

Instead of fallin victim, yo I'm walkin away.

Any feedback positive or negative would be great. Thanks.

Answer 1

Very, very good rant poem! I love it, I did read it aloud, and I really liked it. I'm not a very technical / critical writer, so don't take my compliments in too high regards, but I do write a lot of poems, usually with that type of theme, and I really liked this one. Great job! Very relateable and easy to read.

Answer 2

That's a good poem.  --  jerry

Answer 3

I think it's really good. (:

Answer 4

Its really good.  I like the way you used the rhyme scheme.  And its got good rhythm. =)

Answer 5

very neat poem I like it alot. keep it up dude. =)

I think alot of people can relate to this poem, I know I can.

take care. =)

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Answer 6

i think i really good