How does this clerihew poem sound ....?

Question

turner ashley lauren

she isnt really foreign

I've lived around here

All of my years .

( i got to mix up my name to make my first name last and last name first since i couldnt find anything to rhyme with turner)

thanks for all of ur opinion (and the poem is for school) (im in 8th grade)

Answer 1

sounds fine to me except the 3rd & 4th do not rhyme well. what about "not far not so near" for the last line!