How does this do in continuing the tale?

Question

Trial of Sight

Part Four

~ “Cara, sweet, come in to wash”

Mothers’ voice calls in deathly dream

A little girl wades in water fresh and cool

even in dreams, she could feel its touch

a child with flaxen hair

wild, untamed, her locks and she alike

At her side a silver knife

gift from a father for her protection

along with lessons

to help her kill…. ~

-I used the “~” to show this is a dream… just for future reference… What do you think of this installment?

Blessed Be in the Love of Story and the Light of Connection, Siren

Answer 1

i think your swtill on track and its just fine great work

Answer 2

i love it... again! your writing style is so... idk,, beautiful!

i'll be awaiting the next!! :)

Answer 3

Ah, now I know what the memory is. I love this part.  It gives insight into the character;  she is "wild, untamed", with "flaxen hair".  Write on, Siren!  I will be waiting.  Thank you.