How does this feel for the continuing of a tale?

Question

Trial of Sight

Part Two

“Relent this quest for revenge

and we will grant you leave”

Saliva assaulted Cara

with every condemning word

“WILL YOU RELENT?!”

She would not even give him this

Yes or No was not his right

Her final Hearing, pathetic, undeserving

of the life she had manifested

in herself

brought to the will of arrogant pigs

-I want to keep them all short. My other series have been rather daunting and this one will not last as long as those….. hopefully!

Blessed Be in the Love of Story and Light of Love, Siren

Answer 1

I have little to say, but that I hope Part Three emerges soon. Don't hate me for this one SMALL criticism (and that would be me at my worst...): I feel like the use of the word 'pigs' as the final word left me with a strange image. Perhaps it's because I am an odd person, but again, please don't listen to me. <3 <3

Thank you for this! I have something to look forward to in the days to come...

Answer 2

I am picturing the gun still pointed at Cara while this is happening.  I have the haunted feeling that all hope is lost for her because of her strength of will and the power of her beliefs. This is a very taut and suspenseful moment in the story. The next part cannot come fast enough for me.  Thank you.