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How does this poem sound?

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How does this one sound?

Just like always

As I turn that corner

I am lost in the waves of people

Melting, disappearing

I lose my way

I even completely lose my words

But just one thing

Remains, remains

Your voice

Your smiling faces, your angry faces, everything

Keeps me walking on

The point where the clouds break

I'm sure you can see it

You know what I mean?

Even though I live ambiguously

My heart is immature, but

Because of it, look, over there is

The person important to me

If you get lost

I will be your guide

If you believe in me

I'm positive I know the way

So don't be afraid

The light collects and shoots across the sky

Like it understands you

And then, the road you walk

Shines even more

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  1. I love it.. i could tell you rly care about the person u were writin about... but it didn't...well... flow as much as other poems do. But i wouldnt change it at all suz its amazin


  2. that poem sounds nice

  3. nice poem...it gives u confidence

  4. aww thats soo sweet, did you write it? it was a very well thought out poem

  5. I love how it's so personal. I really like that line, "keeps me walking on." It would be cool if you could repeat that line throughout the poem, but than again, it's your poem. GREAT job!

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  6. Your peom is pretty good but i only read half of it and then I stopped. Your poem had meaning but it didn't pull me in as much as I thought. Its lacking emotion and depth. But over all it was pretty good. Keep it up ^_^

  7. I enjoyed it.  Pretty well written, the concept is easily understood.  All-in-all it's a decent poem.  Congrats!

  8. i got bored after the first 2 lines.srry......its kinda g*y

  9. It's so DEEP!  I love it!

  10. that is a great poem! did you write it? compliements to the writer!

  11. Wow. I love your poem. Its very good and well written. =3

    I got goosebumps.

  12. very well thought out poem. i like it when it says ''Like it understands you And then, the road you walk on Shines even more'' great line. keep on written dude!

  13. Your poem has alot of emotions

    first of all the first two lines

    are you are getting lost

    this happens when there are a number of people

    causing you to disappear

    A person losing their train of thought

    results in the loss of words.

    Different emotions

    because smiling happy faces sad angry ones

    sadness when there are clouds

    when clouds break up

    the happiness is there

    You are someone special because

    it says if a person gets lost

    you will be your guide and help them

    find their way

    the light will also help find the way

  14. If it were seperated into stanzas, it would be a bit better, but as it is, I like it. It's very deep.

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