How is my intro to my book?

Question

You know how people have phobias like fears of spiders or you can get the silly ones like fears of bellybuttons and things like that. What about names? I wouldn’t call it a phobia, just a dislike. I dislike alleriteration names which means that the first and the last name begin with the same letter I can’t stand it, middle names don’t count.

Answer 1

Very Interesting overall a pretty good intro.  However, you might want to check your grammar.  In that last paragraph there are a number of errors (not sure if they were on purpose).

Keep up the good work!