How is my poem? And yes I don't rhyme. Honest opinions?

Question

mucho gracias! haha.

\---> thanks, guys!

A sweet Summer scent finds me

And immediately, not eventually

It brings back retired memories.

But I have not forgotten.

A wild Summer night with friends

Empty promises and prayers that

This Summer will never end.

But I have not forgotten.

A budding uncertainty,

Ended prematurely

As the new school year takes center stage.

But I have not forgotten,

Because I will not succumb

To the passing of time,

Because even thought I may be living in the now,

I am living for next Summer.

Answer 1

Wow...that was simply ah-mazing!  =]

You don't need your's to rhyme if it sounds that incredibly good!

Keep up the awesome work...and I know one day I'll see your poems in a book!!!

=D

Answer 2

that is a very nice poem! i don't know what succumb means, but it is very nice!!!

Answer 3

This is how to live a young life! Hope, and the expectation of new experiences.

Very well expressed indeed

Answer 4

Great Poem!!

I love your expressions

The topic was great and I really enjoyed the structure

Great Job!!

Answer 5

i think it was amazing. there is a poem submition. Submit that. you wil get 1st place. It is awesome and touching, and thats coming from the heart.

Answer 6

lovely.

Answer 7

I love it! I was a fiction writer and poetry major in college and this poem is great. I like how you seem angry with time, and how it is in control of your life and you struggle to take control to find happiness and not let it slip away.

I'm glad you didn't try to rhyme it...rhyming should be saved for song lyricks...if even then.

Good job...keep writing. You should make a summer collection of poems, then submit them. Get the writers market book for poetry and short fiction, that will tell you some good places to send your stuff. Thanks for sharing.

Answer 8

Nice poem!

-All I'll ever be able to write is a corny roses are red, violets are blue poem.

Answer 9

I like it! :-)

Answer 10

its good but because you did the stanzas so off, you might no want to space them, just write all the stanzas together.