How is my poem now that i changed it?

Question

http://www.authspot.com/Poetry/I-Cannot.189437

Answer 1

I have not seen the earlier version to be able to compare and say the change :

by loganjj27, Jul 30, 2008



I cannot hear you.

I cannot see you;

I must be blind.

I cannot hear you;

I must be deaf.

I cannot smell you;

I have no nose.

I cannot touch you;

I have no hands.

I cannot taste you;

I have no tongue.

I cannot understand you;

I must be upset

these are some gems pof wisdom that every man should read and appreciate. Here there is no flight in the welkin , nor the dive deep in the bottom of the dark depth of the ocean. No play of the visionary imagination, but pure, sound, moralistic approach to the daily life !

However it is good !