How is this poem?? and please,be real and tell me whats on your mind?

Question

NATASHA

I want you,but cant have you, my time with you is done.

I reminence on the days i would talk to you just hoping we would be 1.

Never knowing you were mine anyways,Id pursue you everyday.

All i had to say was "will you be mine" and then Id only have to pray that you'd stay.

I miss you everyda,its an evergrowing pain in my heart.

even though we were never together,i wished that we would never part.

As hard as Id try to forget,I never could.

Your'e a reocurring fantasy,I even loved the way you stood.

Ur eyes, lips, style, and smile were all reasons i could never learn in class,

your personality was just the worm that hooked me in like i was a big mouth Bass.

They never liked you,thats because they never understood,

They were all jealous of your beauty,they never saw the true you, the 1 that I never knew i would.

I tried to put girls i was infatuated with in your place,

But just like life,you can not be replaced.

Answer 1

9 it was a beautiful poem and i myself have felt this way. i was just so erm tranced by it. and you seemed to go for a rhyming rhythem but a word or 2 was off rhyming. hence not 10:P other then that the poem was beautiful.

Good luck and write lots more

Ash

Answer 2

It's good, But you should remember you are writing a poem and not a letter. I give it a 8.

Answer 3

I do not think it is that original, because I am pretty sure everyone at some point in their life, has felt this way. Try using some metaphors for some of it. It will help.

I would give it a 6.

Answer 4

U deserve more than a 10 I'd say 15 it was spectacular I think it's about a person who loved another so devotivly but didn't notice there chance and is trying to regain another chance to be with the other but this time there would be no misunderstandings and that the couple would live in day ja voo forever