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How is this poem ?

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Running, jumping, gliding,

Through the trees.

Twirling , swirling, gently

Against the leaves.

Laughing, whispering secrets

Me and my friend , the breeze.

what do you think of it? how can I improve my poem?

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  1. Your poem is good but needs a little correction

    Running, jumping, gliding,

    Through the trees.

    Twirling , swirling, gently

    Against the leaves.

    Laughing, whispering secrets with ease

    Me and my friend , running with the breeze.


  2. Pert and cute, the last line was the frosting! Kudos! A joyful

    read, Neat for a child's poem , yet we can all relate to it,

    Makes me feel Young!

  3. I liked it. You could have something more about the trees or the time of year. You could have more sensory detail like the feel or smell. Overall it is a solid poem with a lot of potential to be better

  4. Perfect! i really like short poems! this is perfect! you leave just enough things unanswered to allow us to use our imaginations and feel like we're in the poem!

  5. I like it. It's a nice rhythm. How can you improve it?

    Add an adjective before trees and leaves. Like:

    Running, jumping, gliding,

    Through the endless trees.

    Twirling , swirling, gently

    Against the  dainty leaves.

    Laughing, whispering secrets

    Me and my friend , the breeze.

    I would say add something before the breeze, but that'll ruin your originality. Good job! Please look at my poem, and honestly answer what you think of it!

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