How many stars out of 10 would you give this poem?

Question

Forget Me Not

When I first saw you,

I suddenly knew,

that my long-forgotten dream,

had finally come true.

When you came forward,

you brought joy to thee.

The blessed angels,

have came and blessed me.

Your eyes were so bright,

They filled me with light.

I began to love you,

with all of my might.

Your angelic voice,

was music to my ear.

When you called my name,

songs of bliss I'd hear.

I love you most,

for who you are.

Better than all else,

by far and far.

--Unfortunately,

fate dealt us a trick,

tore us apart.

It had been so quick.

But do not despair,

Although there's something we lack,

I'll wait for you,

'till you finally come back.

But I'm also afraid,

you'll never come back.

What if you forget,

to return what I lack?

Therefore, I ask for one thing,

to eventually give, what I've long sought.

Your invaluable love.

So please, please,

......forget me not.

Answer 1

Out of 10... i would give it 20 did you make that up it was awesome.

Answer 2

9....in the second stanza, last line, second word, change "came" to come."  And in the fourth stanza, second line, last word, change "ear" to "ears."  

And I think in the 7th stanza you say Although there's something we lack.  But then you go on to say that the thing lacking is the other person from your life, so I think you need to say "Although there's something "I" lack.

And in the next stanza, say But I'm afraid instead of But I'm also afriad.

Other than that it is a very good, deep, inciteful poem!!