How ridiculous is my first monorhyme poem?

Question

Loose - monorhyme etheree'

See

with me

finally.

Eternity.

Whispers, subtle glee,

reminders of what we

had the potential to be.

Let go of animosity,

it will break the heart's integrity,

and all that we once loved will fade, will flee.

Answer 1

It's lovely, not ridiculous!

Answer 2

youre such a good teacher for me to read E. :)

..and im going to ebay and looking for that scale Jeffs has.

i want one of those Yashmahash thingys..

Answer 3

So true so true!!!  A Lesson to be Learned!!

Cheers!!

Answer 4

I put this on Lourie's Scale of Ridiculousitude, and it registered a mere 0.4243465670808513024700732 on a scale of 0.0 to 10.0. You will just have to try harder in the future.

However, when placed on Yashmahooley's Scale of Poetic excellence the reading was quite high, 7.95465156113547.

Answer 5

It reflects reality, simple

yet direct.  It holds truths

that bubble in the bitter

hearts of some humans.