How to fix my poem???

Question

what can i do to fix this

Lost unseen unknown

And i havnt got a hope

I have no clue where to go

Maybe I should shout

I think its time to stand out

Many years alone

without a soul to a bone

No one to stand by my side

No one to help me hide

I thing i should break free

i think its time to be me

or maybe i should keep the key

So that no one can see

i think ill stay hidden

And forever ill be forbidden

any ideas how to make this better???????

Answer 1

No ideas but it does need some work.  Dropped in to say Amanda is a nice name.  Good luck with the poem.

Ok..ok.....stop hitting me...here's (only) a suggestion which may help you or not.

Lost unseen unknown

No hope nor clue

Where to go I shout

To make me stand out?

Years spent alone

Without soul nor hope

No-one by my side

To help me to hide

I have to break out

I just want to live

Should I just keep the key

So that no one can see

No, let me stay hidden

Forever forbidden

Answer 2

First, spelling things correctly helps.  Second, you have a couple lines that don't rhyme, but the rest do; be consistent.  If you're going to rhyme, make it fit better.