How to make this sentence right?

Question

. Every child in the world needs someone to watch over them and if a coach or a parent keeps pressuring a child in doing something that they don’t want then that is not protection that is abuses.

Answer 1

To say what I think you want to would be best conveyed if you split it into two sentences:

Every child in the world needs someone to watch over him or her.  If a coach, or parent, pressures the child into doing something against his or her wishes, this can change from protection to abuse.

However, if it MUST be one sentence, try:

When a coach or parent, whose primary job should be to watch over a child, pressures that child into doing something against his or her wishes, it can become abuse rather than protection.

HTH,

: )  Petra

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Answer 2

every child in the world needs someone to watch over them, if a coach or a parent is pressuring a child in doing something that they dont want then that is not protection, it is abuse.

Answer 3

Every child needs someone to watch over them, and if a coach or parent keeps pressuring a child into  doing something that they dont want to do, then that is not protection - that is abuse.