How to say it better?

Question

Can you please help me revise this paragraph, I want it to sound polite while having a strong impact on him. Also, I want it to sound less begging and more if he changes my grade he will be doing himself a favor.

This is the e-mail:

"I do not want to look back at this grade with agony and discomfort. This is my lowest mark I have ever received and it will hurt me dramatically in the future. Therefore, I would like for you to help me like you have helped my other fellow classmates who have talked so highly of you helping them."

Thank you!

Answer 1

Sounds perfectly sucky to me, leave it as it is!

Answer 2

Forget the email for a second, and just ask yourself one thing:   do you really deserve a better grade than the one you got?

If so, go ahead and send the email -- but tell the teacher POLITELY why you think you deserve a higher grade.

If not, then just accept the grade you got.  

Maybe the grade is the lowest one you've ever gotten, and maybe it will affect your future -- but if it's the grade you truly deserved for the work you did, then sorry, but that's life.  

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Answer 3

just tell but be sure that  it is true because if it is not true that is not telling better

Answer 4

its good, and i don't think its begging.

Answer 5

...have ever received and "I'm afraid that it will have a negative effect on my academic future."

...Therefore, I would "greatly appreciate it if you would lend me a helping hand, as you have done for my fellow classmates."

Hope this helps.