My first attempt at writing lyrics.
I am no good with melodies, so I wrote them to the tune of the Jonas Brothers' "Shelf"
You were the first
You taught me what love was
I knew from the start
That you were the only one
But you’ve gone astray
Now I’ve done all that I could
You’ve given me up for good
You told me you’d be here for me
You’d travel over land and over sea
But now you say we weren't meant to be
I was the only for you
And now my heart has split clean into two
Don't tell me you're in love with someone new
We had a dream
But it was a long shot
I was willing to try
But now you have gone on
to another girl
You’ve replaced your 'whole world'
But you say it’s in the past
You’d be here for me
You’d travel over land and over sea
But now you say we weren't meant to be
Only one for you
And now my heart has split clean into two
Don't tell me you're in love with someone new
I’m trying to just be friends with you
But it’s something I can’t seem to do
First off, is the message clear? Can you understand the general meaning behind it? And second, how would you improve it?
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