How would you evaluate my poem? Would it have an impact on its reader?

Question

Wheel of Fate

Sometimes Life can be so tiring

It's either you win or lose

You almost reach the end

But something's stopping you

A Wheel of fate and fortune

Gets flat but gets air too

Depends on how you plan it

Depends on how you grew

Exasperating I must confess

Bleeding my brain so true

Have friends to come along with

But no one you can talk to

Answer 1

gurl i love this poem

Answer 2

It seems that rhyming poems are becoming less and less common these days, and I don't understand why. I'm glad to see one here, and a very good one at that. You have some very good and original ideas in here, and and I love some of the metaphors, like "...Gets flat but gets air too."

The last 2 lines are puzzling me, I think I'm going to have to look at them for a while to figure out exactly what you mean. That's no complaint though, a good poem should need more than one read-through in my opinion.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, nice job.

Answer 3

It is really lovely.

I think a lot of people would be able to relate to it and hence at the very least make them think a little.

Explore this side of you it seems you have real talent.

All the best...