How would you say this does in continuing the story?

Question

Trial of Sight

Part Six

“Is the little witch still out”

Voices in the dark

“How did she survive your slip of finger?”

a stranger speaks

“Her alliance to the devils around her,”

the judge

Her hands were bound,

feet tied

but spirit would not break

Her father had not given her a soul of fear

and these ManDevils would not take her

-The strangest if them all for me to write… I had to work hard not to be too repetitive. I would love to hear your thoughts…

Blessed Be in Love, Light and the ongoing tale, Siren

Answer 1

Well, this seems to clear the confusion, and it leaves me thirsting for more. I hope there's more. There d**n well better be more, or I shall bring the Wrath of the Board down on thy head. Please more! Please ma'am may I have some more?

Answer 2

It is often difficult to write a dialog - that is going on in the background - while the main character is supposed to be "out of it".  I guess - it is because - the writer usually identifies with the main character - therefore - writing a situation of this sort - often seems strange. Well done ♥

Answer 3

And now there is a mysterious stranger added to the cast of characters.  It is a relief that Cara has survived and her courageous spirit seems indomitable.  I admire her.  This is  dramatic and fascinating.  I am enjoying the series so much.  Thank you.