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Hows my Poetry? Opinions Please?

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Well, I wrote this poem for my BF, and I was wondering about some opinions on it. Please read it and leave a comment!! :)

P.S. i know the first doesn't rhyme.

wish I could Explain,

The way that I feel,

When you hold me close,

in your arms.

It feels so right,

Just you and me,

almost as if it were destiny,

that brought you here by my side

I think about you most every day,

and I can't help but wonder,

If you feel this way towards me,

this love, screams loud as thunder.

If you had to walk 10,000 miles,

just to hear my voice,

would you choose to take that path,

or make a different choice?

Will you choose to be my friend,

stay here by my side?

Or will you choose to walk away,

and leave me far behind??

You've been here longer than I know,

I'll try to understand,why it is you shy away,

when I try to take your hand.

I'm scared you'll forget,

the times that we've had,

in this year and a half that has passed,

that I'll just be some fading memory,

pushed into your past.

So it's with a heavy heart,

I'll try to let you go,

so you can go and find someone,

a better friend, you know.

But if you ever find your self,

searching for old friends,

just know that I'll be waiting here,

right 'til the very end

THNAKS FOR ALL YOU WHO TOOK THE TIME TO READ THIS!!!

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  1. I love it!!!! but if you want to make it better, I suggest you read Shakespeare. He has a lot of great love poems.  


  2. I don't know Yahoo! it.

  3. that was deep. i luv it.

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