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Question

If these people, like Mary and Susie, continue to have related symptoms, then they would become homebound and, possibly, suicidal. After mother-in-law told Susie that she does not need a nose surgery and her nose looks fine, Susie went into her bathroom and bruised her nose by hitting it with the sink's faucet. People with body dysmorphic disorder are over-sensitive about their looks and they are concern about what others think of their imagined or slightly defect of their physical appearance. For example, Susie thinks nurse were laughing about her nose that looks long and she becomes sensitive about her look. This somatoform disorder is one of the serious mental diseases that possibly lead to deaths, and people with this mental disorder need to be recovered by psycho therapy– not plastic surgery.

Answer 1

If people like Mary and Susie continue to have symptoms, then they could become homebound and possibly suicidal. After Susie's mother-in-law told her that she does not need nose surgery and her nose looks fine, Susie went into the bathroom and bruised her nose by hitting it on the faucet. People with body dysmorphic disorder are over-sensitive about their looks and are concerned with what others think of an imagined or slight defect of their physical appearance. For example, after Susie hears nurses laughing and saying that her nose looks too long, she becomes sensitive about her appearance. This somatoform disorder is one of several serious mental diseases that can possibly lead to death. People with this mental disorder need to seek psychotherapy– not plastic surgery.

Answer 2

If these people, like Mary and Susie, continue to have related symptoms, then they would become homebound, and possibly suicidal.  After her mother-in-law told Susie that she does not need nose surgery and that her nose was fine, Susie went into her bathroom and bruised her nose by hitting it on the sink's faucet.  People with body dysmorphic disorder are over-sensitive about their looks and they are concerned about what others think about their imagined or what they consider a slight defect of their physical appearance.  For example, Susie thinks the nurses were laughing about her nose, that it looks long, and she becomes sensitive about her looks.  This somatoform disorder is one of many serious mental diseases that could possibly lead to deaths, and people with this mental disorder need to be treated using psycho-therapy, not plastic surgery.

Answer 3

If these people, like Mary and Susie, continue to have related symptoms, then they could become homebound and possibly suicidal.  After her mother-in-law told Susie that she does not need nose surgery (and that her nose looked fine), Susie went into her bathroom and bruised her nose by hitting it on the sinks' faucet.  People with body dysmorphic disorder are overly sensitive regarding their looks and are concerned about what others think of their "imagined" or slightly defective physical appearance.  For example, Susie thought nurses were laughing at her nose, which looks long, and she became sensitive about her looks.  This somatoform disorder is one of the more serious mental diseases which possibly leads to death.  People with this type of mental disorder should be treated with psychotherapy, not plastic surgery.

Answer 4

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