I'm 10 love to write

Question

Look down at the long long road.A tear drip on thestone hard ground.She dosen't hear a sound.The hot summer air is drifting.Stop at the sea to cry in the ocean evry tear a lost hope and memory.The day's are hard and the heat is getting wors.Emotions sudenly burst.Never had a choice never had a voice.Soul lost in the beautiful moon lihgt.Ran away looking for a home.But dyed instead.PS i'm about to write a happy one.I like writing sad one's cause they capture more emotion more attention.Only good comments no mean one's!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 1

Is this a poem? Whatever, I really like it! It got me really into the story! Are you sure your only 10? I'm 12 and I can't write that good. My dream also is to be a writer though... And yes I think sad ones do capture more attention. Good luck :)

Answer 2

You need to significantly improve your grammar and it also seems a bit unorganized.

Brush up on those critical skills and you will be a very good writer!

I am not trying to be mean, I'm just trying to help you improve.

Other than the few problems, the sample selection was great!

Answer 3

i love it

Answer 4

Whoa! That was amazing! I cant believe your ten! I'm thirteen and I cant even get that deep with my writing. Like most people commenting this question I am a writer and I think you are a really good one. Keep it up and keep posting your writing. I love it!

xoxo, Brittany