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I've written a poem. Is it any good?

by Guest33134  |  earlier

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It was a Tuesday

You dropped your suitcase by my house

It was left unattended in the closet

I had no intentions and neither did you

Up against a wall you held me

Softly whispered your intentions in my ear

I flooded in my own blood

Frightening rebellion

Your shoes are too big for me

No matter how I try

I’m smaller than you

Smaller in body and mind

Put away my bruises and cuts

I put them in your suitcase

6 weeks later and it’s full

All your dirty cast-offs

Fresh suitcase, fresh mind set

Like usual you knock

Knock the door, knock me

The hallway is a dreaded place

It’s there you go

You’ve smashed everything else

Smashed my insides and smashed my furniture

All that’s left is your memory

It’s Thursday today

You took the old suitcase full of your mess

Emptied it in the river

It swims with the fish

How long will it be ‘till you empty me

Tip me upside down shake me in my shoes

Smile sweetly, kiss my lips

Then cast me off into that river

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12 ANSWERS


  1. thats good


  2. thats amazing!i wish i could write like that

  3. it's really good!

  4. thats so good. i write poems like..when im depressed. its strong and powerful but amazing...

  5. It is sad, but it is really good.

  6. it blows

  7. its really good!

  8. oh yes this is brilliant you can do more of this but yes it is good

  9. wow really good =]

  10. Wow. That was really, really good. Keep writing! On a scale of 1-10, it was a 13.

  11. amazing. Its deep and you put alot of emotion in it.

  12. Wow. That's intense, but really good.

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