I Need to make an introduction for my English Essay but I'm not sure if it is good?

Question

well I have to do a biography about a famous person, so a pick "Ellen DeGeneres", but I Don't know if my introduction is excellent here is what I have for now:

There are so many things I would love to introduce about myself. One of them is my crazy, but interesting way of life: hosting, acting or singing and charity, because Hosting express my attitudes and feelings, acting and singing tell people my opinions about life and charity is the most important form to show people how grateful I am with each one of them.

Answer 1

You are repeating yourself over and over. Try to work on something more creative and smooth. Also, hosting shouldn't be capitalized on line 3. Hope this helps.