I am tired, so this poem is probably rubbish... Is it ?

Question

Opportunities

Everyday I see, the new arrivals come

George is the latest one

Large and fat, he gives a wink

He wears a grey big suit

His pockets always clink

Then there is old Robert

Stands for many hours

Lost in thought, one would think

Larry is there also

Short but noble one

Of a life in the country

Honest work under sun

Soon a night will set

And more of them I will meet

Into a land of yellow heat

Will you join my many dreams

I will wait for you to come

And join the land of broken ones

Answer 1

i dont think its rubbish.... but i wouldnt publish it in a book.  it just needs someediting.... cause i tink it has like a meaning if you look farther. keep on writing.... but mayb wen u r less tired. good luck.

Answer 2

That is a great poem. Where are these people that you are seeing and analyzing from?

Answer 3

Wow, this is really lovely. It isn't the sort of poem that leaves you with a dozen questions buzzing around your head, but in a way that is sort of relieving to be able to read a poem that you can grasp and enjoy easily for once.

Answer 4

I'd make some changes so it flows better right before the end. Maybe not use names but just descriptions. It's good but needs a little reworking.