I am young and found a passion for poetry. (I like it because it helps release my pain)Can you help me with it

Question

Ok well I am going into 7th grade. And anyways I have been in a lot of painfull situations with my family and I found that the only way to let out my pain was to write poetry. So can you help me with it please? Advice? Tips? Criticism? Comments? Thanks! Here it goes (I haven't thought of a title) Should I name it Surrender?

My tears fall to the floor.

Match the rhythm of my heart.

'Can't take this anymore.

I feel I'm falling apart.

I Surrender.

I look up to the sky.

It's never blue anymore.

It's black again, I cry.

What are black skies even for?

I Surrender.

Wake to thunder roaring.

Raging below starless skies.

Lightning, bright and soaring,

The only light in my eyes.

I Surrender.

The sun rises slowly.

With it's healing scarlet sky.

A cloud foats by, lowly.

I catch a glimpse in my eye.

I Surrender.

I close my eyes, relieved.

When I open them, I cry.

Cuz I had been deceived.

I knew I dreamed of a lie.

I Surrender.

(Sorry I need more room)

Answer 1

this is good, i don't write poetry but i do read a lot and you should not stop with your writing.With a little direction you can go far with this . Good luck

Answer 2

Have you thought about picking up a guitar and writing songs?  You seem like you have a talent for it....for 7th grade you are extremely good.  I would say you obviously have a gift...maybe look at the hard times in your life as the thing that drove you to write and discover your talent....so perhaps difficult times are not all bad.  But the main thing is stick with it...trust yourself and whatever you do don't take negative feedback too seriously...everyone has an opinion...remember, it's your own opinion that is the most important.

Answer 3

hey.my name is Tyhera and I super LOOOve poetry with extra x's and o's!Lol. On the same term I super love ur poem as well. This poem seems like the poem would've became more intense I really did not feel ur pain accelerating. but i love ur poem its really amazing and great. I loved the victorious ending (which that could've been more exciting). jus try not to hold any of your feelings back...its poetry!!!...kind of  like a stress ball. But I love ur poem sooo much!!! this was ur first time and thats amazing but as u continue to write u'll find ur flaws and things like that...U did very great on this I'm so proud of u!!!Continue writing!!God Bless

Answer 4

wow. i really love this poem! if i was in the position to i would publish it in a poetry book!