I ask only for critique?

Question

Since I do have too many poems to put in the question, please read at:

www.urbis.com/calingaladha

or

www.allpoetry.com/calingaladha

and specify which poem you are critiquing in your answer!

Thank you!

Answer 1

the rhincerous poem...wasnt feeling it. shadow and shadowland wer 2 similar. ur alryt. ur better than a lot of ppl.

Answer 2

I read a few and I thought they were pretty good. Espically for your age.

You have very good vocabulary.

Answer 3

I like the one about the royal blood. And the limerick...except why did you leave the guest....

I didn't understand that

Answer 4

I request you to include some satire in your poem

Answer 5

Your poem is like your just trying to inform us on a fact that anybody already knows and it's only narrating a story

try to add words with an emotion

by the way, it's only what i think your poem is great by the way you want it to look like your good. ^^

Answer 6

I think your poetry is reasonably good when your age is taken into account. You have fairly good control over your vocabulary, though it tends toward the flowery, and you have a good way with producing images.

However, because you don't have a lot of life experience yet, you don't have much to say, so you depend on 'fantasy'. Because you don't have a lot of experience to draw on, your fantasy tends to be drawn from other people's fantasy work that you have read or watched. Don't mistake me, this is not a "bad" thing and you will (likely) grow out of this style as you get older. Since your current work is quite distant and external to you, don't be too eager to find out "how good it is" until you know that what you write is cutting closer to the bone.

Toward that end, if I were you, I would continue to write, as you do show promise, but I would try to move closer to my own life  experience and express things that I actually know and have understanding of *personally*, and compose in less gothic terms--it is entirely possible to have life-based 'fantasy' writing.

Answer 7

It's allright i read the forest one i little simplistic or bland but off to a good start

Answer 8

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