I based this poem around a haiku I wrote one morning--whatcha all think?

Question

Pause

There’s a pause in life sometimes

That last clinging moment of fall before the release

Suspended in infinity

Pure and complete

A quiet man sits

Under a gentle grey sky,

Peacefully watches

A hint of summer, an echo

Can be felt in the sharp air

But it is acute

Quiet

Hidden

It is the leaf

Soon to descend

Soon to whither

Soon to freeze

These are the moments we remember;

We go back to them

When there is no direction

And peace is a dream,

We exist in them

Again

Holding on

Returning to that impossible moment

That perfect slice

When in the unstoppable chaos

There was respite

And life–our self–was free.

Answer 1

Shows promise.  The first line needs replacing.

Also, the line "Soon to whither" doesn't make any sense to me; if it's a pun then you need to supply more context.

Answer 2

OMG!!  So good!  U should enter this poem into a contest!  Way to go!

Also, can anyone answer my posted question?...."I met a guy at a party, and I'm never going to see him again!?"

Answer 3

oh i like this one.

its really good.

=]

Answer 4

Tis is toooooooooo lovely, touchs my heart deeply.

Thank you, for the reminder!

Answer 5

That pause in life is well thought out in your poem.  It is introspective.

Answer 6

This is a compelling and provocative poem about that pause to reflect we must all take sometimes.  You have described both the tranquil and embracing nature of these pauses and the need for them so well, all encapsulated in the last five lines.  Just beautiful.  Thank you.

Answer 7

meaning is not clear

Answer 8

This is nothing but pure wisdom in the form of prose.  I found comfort in these words. Thank you.

Answer 9

Its great

Answer 10

Well done.  A strong thought sequence that everyone has gone through.  My compliments.