I didn't want to, but my hand was forced, so will you read this? I didn't end sentences with prepositions.?

Question

Mimes on the shore in my bed, Jill

Hatched by the melting w***e of brooms.

Hives stained by grains (a horrid hum), as

Jews hid the hooks of tramps, very bored.

Lies will grow...

As babies suck the titties

Answer 1

I am enjoying the way that a few people have posted mimetic poems on here in the last few weeks.

I think the same rules apply in mimetic poetry as in the regular stuff (other things being equal), so I wasn't comfortable with 'w***e' - it seems to me archly archaic (like finding 'hath' or 'eftsoons' in a poem).

That wasn't a deal-breaker though: apart from that small but real irritation I thought the piece asked more questions than it answered. Nearly always a good thing.

Answer 2

What?  hmmm.

Answer 3

Grandly cobbled together.

As usual there is one forced, superficial line, at least seemingly.

It is the fourth one. Other than that its good, with a conclusion to be proud of.

Answer 4

wtf is this about?

"Lies will grow...

As babies suck the tities"

roflmfao

:D