I gotta another poem. Look up my other ones and read them too, please.?

Question

"Everything's a Blur."

When I sit,

And stare at you,

Deep into your eyes.

It seems as though,

The world just fades,

Like a big surprise.

I don't see trees,

I don't see birds,

I don't see skies of blue.

I don't see jets,

I don't see planes,

All I see is you.

Your eyes are dark,

And so mysterious,

Almost like a lure.

Cause when I look in them,

I can't see,

Everything's a blur.

Answer 1

i really enjoyed this poem!

Well done! you were excellent!

please continue writing!

you are a great poet!x

Answer 2

this is really good.  The only change I would make would be the last verse.  Instead of Cause when I look in them (because it changes the flow of the entire poem) try "for when I look in them I cannot see, Everything's a blur."  Just a thought.  Great work.  I love this poem.